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See, that’s what the app is perfect for.

Sounds perfect Wahhhh, I don’t wanna
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protectyourdarlings

forget MuskBot behold Chocolate Robot Chef! 🦾

owlscbooks

It’s that fucking chocolate guy again.

official-lucifers-child

the fucking whisk made my jaw actually fuckin drop, what the hell man

patt-off

my first reaction to seeing this on my feed was “it’s the fucking chocolate guy again what’s he making this time”

i was not expecting an entire robot holy shit

deepcoraldragon

The ten stages of chocolate Guy:

- what’s he making this time?

- WOW

- what’s he making this time?

- WOW

- what’s he making this time?

- WOW

- OH it’s a robot!! :D

- damn I wanna eat that

- IT’S STILL GOING

- fucking WOW

evilphrog

My favorite part of this is how he puts his name in the corner of every video for the entire time, and yet we all collectively decided he is Chocolate Guy. Like if I told people I saw a video by Amaury Guichon eberyone would be like ??? Bt if I say “New Chocolate Guy video!” everyone loses their minds!

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Actions sequences

deardragonbook

A couple of things to maybe help you out a bit: 

1-Try not to make them too long. I enjoy action, but when it goes on for several chapters (or a whole chapter depending on chapter length), and it’s not a big final battle or something important, sometimes I just get bored. Honestly, even if it’s the final battle sometimes I just get bored when the payoff isn’t done well enough. And it’s not that I don’t like action, I do, but he punches, she punches, he ducks, she jumps, powers here, powers there… I need dialogue, story! Just action for too long is tiring. 

2-Which brings me into my second point, make sure the plot and dialogue continue into the action. I can take a lot more action if there’s a conversation going on at the same time. Or, if it’s the final battle and there are high stakes, building tension and all that. 

3-Use a combination of short and long paragraphs to get pacing right. Me and many other novice authors at one point thought action meant fast pacing, faster, faster, and accomplished this through short and fast paragraphs. But this can take away from a scene. Instead try longer paragraph and use one liners or shorter paragraphs to accentuate important bits. 

4-Make sure your audience knows who is who. There is nothing more frustrating in a fight scene then not knowing who threw the punch. I know it’s scary, the idea you’ll overuse a character’s name. And it’s a very real possibility, but at the end of the day, repetitive name calling is less frustrating than straight up confusion. But, if you really want to avoid the name game, you can play around with things like powersets, if one character fights exclusively with say fire power, well, I know the fireball didn’t come from the water witch! 

5-If an injury isn’t life threatening, if it isn’t bad enough for a character to freeze or turn the tides of battle, don’t pause for it. Mention the hit, sure, maybe the pain, maybe even a tiny mention of blood. But don’t stop to describe the full on injury, that can wait until after the battle, when the character’s have time to actually look down at themselves and see what they just went through.  

aethelflaedladyofmercia

Great tips!

I would add: Don’t describe actions, describe emotions. We don’t always need to know every hit and block, but we do need to know when the hero is feeling scared, when they almost give up, what they think of when they rally for the next charge, etc.

It can be tempting to go into endless detail about the wrong thing. Ideally, you want a balance of actions, sensations (pain, smell of blood, etc) and emotions.

(Weird fact: this same rule turns out to be great for smut scenes too…)

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